别人说我的文章里语法全是错误我真的不知道哪里错了也没人可以问ThetablegraphindicatesthedataaboutchangesinthetypesofjourneyinEnglandbetween1985and2000.Itcanbeclearlyseenfromthetablethatthemost

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别人说我的文章里语法全是错误 我真的不知道哪里错了 也没人可以问
The table graph indicates the data about changes in the types of journey in England between 1985 and 2000.
It can be clearly seen from the table that the most popular transport was 3199 by car in 1985 while it experienced a rising to 4806 in 2000.There was noticeable data which people choose long distance bus with 54 in 1985 escalated to 124 in 2000.However,taxi and train using increased slightly 13 to 42 and 289 to 366 respectively in 1985 and 2000.Moreover,other type transports illustrated an upsurge in 1985 with 450 to 585 in 2000.
By contrast,people walking for travel with 255 in 1985 dropped to the next fifteen years 237.Similarly,Local bus demonstrated rapidly from 429 to 274 from period of 1985 and 2000.The figure showed a small decrease of 51 to 41 by the use of bicycle in 1985 to 2000.
In summarizes,the total figure in 1985 was 4740 whilst the statistical in 200o was 6475.

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The table graph （是table还是graph还是table and graph)indicates (用shows比较好）the(the不要用） data about （the用在这里）changes in the （说的是不同的交通工具?加个different）types of journey（指的是什么?交通?transportation?) in England between 1985 and 2000.
It can be clearly seen from the table that the most popular transport was 3199（3199什么意思?人数?） by car in 1985 while（用and吧）it（不要it)experienced a rising(用increase,rising the numbers） to 4806 in 2000.There was noticeable data which(用of) people choose(choosing) long distance bus(buses) with 54(with 54 ）in 1985 escalated to 124 in 2000.
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The table and graph shows data about the changes in the different types of transportation in England between 1985 and 2000.
It can be clearly seen from the table that the most popular transport was by car in 1985 with a figure 3199.It also experienced an increase,raising the number to 4806 in 2000.There was noticeable data showing the figure of 54 people choosing long distance buses in 1985 has escalated to 124 in 2000.Additionally,taxi and train use has also increased slightly from 13 to 42 and 289 to 366 respectively in 1985 and 2000.Moreover,other types of transport had an upsurge as well with the number going from 450 to 585 between 1985 and 2000.
By contrast,the number people who travel by walking has dropped.The 255 people in 1985 have dropped to 237 in the next fifteen years.Similarly,Local bus use has demonstrated a rapid decrease from 429 to 274 from 1985 to 2000.The figure showed a small decrease from 51 to 41 of bicycle use from 1985 to 2000.
In conclusion,the total figures of transportation in 1985 were 4740 while the statistics in 2000 was 6475.
我也不知道这写的是什么.