英语语法..麻烦帮我看一下有没有语法错误youweresocharmingwhenyouwereplayingbasketball.that'swhyIlovedyou.andthattimeinmyeyes,youareatall,thin,handsome,healthyandperfectboy.youcametomyheartatonce.andno

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英语语法..麻烦帮我看一下有没有语法错误
you were so charming when you were playing basketball.
that's why I loved you .
and that time in my eyes ,you are a tall,thin,handsome ,healthy and perfect boy.
you came to my heart at once.
and no one could take the place of you at the moment.
but now I must say sorry to you .
because I have hurt you deeply.
I promise that I will never forget the time with you .
it is so bright and wondful.
you are the first boy to me.
you are a really good boy.
I hope you will find a girl whom will be much better than I.
Thanks for you loved me.
Thanks,I am so sorry.

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全文修正如下: ~~可以用word的比较功能对照查看,这里不另外标注了.
You were so charming when you were playing basketball.
That's why I loved you.
At that time, in my eyes, you are a tall,thin,handsome, healthy and perfect boy.
You came to my heart at once; and no one could have taken the place of you at the moment.
But now I must say "sorry" to you because I have hurt you so.
I promise that I will never forget the time I spent with you.
It was so bright and wonderful.
You are the first boy to me.
You are a really good boy.
I hope you find a girl who will be much better to you than I am.
Thanks for having loved me.
Thanks; and I am so sorry.
备注:
1/ and 和 because不用来领句式.
2/ 部分地方使用逗号加强了语气, 如"in my eyes, ",否则可以调下句中短语顺序.
3/相当情真意切的一份表达.不过,有些地方比较带中国式的表达习惯,还请楼主在使用中注意对象.
(此部分予以保留,以体现lz风格.例如"tall,thin,handsome, healthy and perfect "的形容词叠;"you find a girl who will be much better to you than I am"表达的意思等.)