初二英语作文修改Everybodywantstosucceed.Butwhenitcomestothequestionwhatthesuccessis.Manypeoplesay”Idon’tknowhowtosay.”What’sthesuccess?Inmyopinion,successistheprogressiverealizationofworthyideals,toget

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初二英语作文修改
Every body wants to succeed.But when it comes to the question what the success is.Many people say”I don’t know how to say.”
What’s the success?In my opinion,success is the progressive realization of worthy ideals,to get the results you want.But different people will offer different answers.
That how to achieve it?Let us analyze the path to true success.First you need to have a definition of success,as mentioned above.Second,as is known to all ,no pains,no gains,nothing for nothing.So we must try our best to do every thing.Because victory won’t come to me unless I go to it.And sometimes you have to be your own hero.So,you should learn to be strong.This is the third.Chaplin once said“You have to believe in yourself .That's the secret of success”So fourth,you must be a confident person.If you follow the above said to do,nothing is impossible.Never underestimate your power to change yourself.
At last,“Standing in the hall of fame.”麻烦各位修改一下这篇作文,语法有错误的请指出,反正你们认为怎样好怎样改
有些啰嗦的地方可以进行删减，老师说要拿去参赛的，最好同一个词不要在文中出现太多，可以用同意思的词代替。这样显得有点重复啰嗦。

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Question加about,how to achieve it前that改then,nothing for nothing,逗号,去掉so,we小写,try our best to do everything后建议加个well,victory won't come to用us,因为上文用our,this is the third改in addition,fourth改the third,follow后改成what is said above to do