求修改英文自我介绍!多多修改!这些是我写好的,中文部分麻烦各位填一下Helloeveryone,Iamverygladtobeheretomakeaself-introductiontoallofyou.Mynameis-----------,andmyEnglishnameisCatherine,it’ssame

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求修改英文自我介绍!多多修改!
这些是我写好的,中文部分麻烦各位填一下
Hello everyone ,I am very glad to be here to make a self-introduction to all of you.
My name is ----------- ,and my English name is Catherine ,it’s same to Miss Lin.
I graduated from -----------------school.I’m an outgoing girl,but a bit lazy.I am trying to change this situation.
I like everything about music,so I always listen to music and sing songs on weekends.I have learned the accordion for 5 years.I think the accordion is a special kind of instrument,because of its--外形---,------音色---- and---发声原理--------.My favorite band is Westlife ,although they aren’t boys now.I think many boys and girls like them too.
It’s very lucky for me as the student in class one.Because I am a student in class 1 for 12 years,which means,I always stay in class one.I believe that we can get along well with each other.
还有一些想写的,
我想为大家推荐一首歌,是我的lucky song,珠儿的stay here forever
因为中考前我的压力很大,每天晚上会听广播来放松一会.一次听到了这首歌,它的节奏,旋律使我听了心情很舒畅,我试图寻找它的名字,但都失败了.考后我又很偶然地找到了它,所以我认为它是我的幸运歌.
这句话能否这样改呢?
And many boys and girls in our class such as ------,----- are just like them.
还想加一句话：在座的有很多是我的校友喽、
关于lucky song 是偶尔一次在广播里听到的,此后再没听过了,只是让我那晚上心情很好,之后想起这个旋律心情就很好、一楼的句子要改改意思哦!
我们介绍完要同学提问的,lucky song 的那部分也可以写成回答为什么我认为他是我的lucky song 的形式
问：你为什么选择学习手风琴呢?
答：其实我的初衷是学习钢琴,但是我妈觉得钢琴学的人太多,反而手风琴很有特色,携带起来也方便、
对于作出回答的好人们,在此先谢过!

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Hello everyone , I am very glad to be here to make a self-introduction to all of you.
I am----------- ,and my English name is Catherine ,it’s same to Miss Lin.
I graduated from -----------------school. I’m outgoing, but a bit lazy. That's why I am trying to change this situation.
Coz I like everything about music, I listen and sing songs on weekends. I'm proud to say that I learnt the accordion for nearly 5 years. I think the accordion is a special kind of instrument, because of its shape,its sound and its structure. Westlife is my favorite band,although they are not boys any longer. And many boys and girls are just like them.
It’s lucky for me to be a student in our class. Because I am a student in class 1 for almost 12 years. It means that I prefer to stay in class one. I believe that we can get along well with each other.
At last, I want to introduce you my lucky song, stay here forever by Zhur. Do you know why? When I felt the stress before the Entrance Examination to Senior Middle School, I loved to listen to this song which had a haunting tune. What's more, I found the name of this song by accident. That's the reason why I regard it as my lucky song.
有些内容我改得更口语化,有些改得更顺口更地道~
呼呼好累~
祝你成功哦~
补充：
1.这句话能否这样改呢?
And many boys and girls in our class such as ------,----- are just like them.
这句话是可以这样改的!
2.还想加一句话： 在座的有很多是我的校友喽、
There are many young people who are my schoolmate here

3.关于lucky song 是偶尔一次在广播里听到的,此后再没听过了,只是让我那晚上心情很好,之后想起这个旋律心情就很好、一楼的句子要改改意思哦!

我们介绍完要同学提问的,lucky song 的那部分也可以写成回答为什么我认为他是我的lucky song 的形式
如果你想他们提问你,你就一句话代过你的lucky song.比如：Moreover, I want to introduce a song to you, ***. This is my lucky song, so I love it very much.
如果他们问你为什么,你就答：
I heart this through the broadcast by chance. However,I haven't heart the rhythm since that time. Everytime when I feel stress, I would think of that song. Then I will feel better.
4.问：你为什么选择学习手风琴呢?
答：其实我的初衷是学习钢琴,但是我妈觉得钢琴学的人太多,反而手风琴很有特色,携带起来也方便、
answer: I prefer piano at first. But my mom thinks that there're too many people who learn to play piano. And the accordion is more unique and it's convenient to carry.