一篇英语作文,请严厉指出错误吧!title：AWonderfulTripIlikearoundtheworldwithmyfather.Itmakesmehappy.Oneday,wehavebeentoHongKong.So,atfirstday,wewenttoDisneyParkwiththem.Therearemanygames.Itsoexcited.Andwe

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一篇英语作文,请严厉指出错误吧!
title：A Wonderful Trip
I like around the world with my father.It makes me happy.One day,we have been to Hong Kong.So,at first day,we went to Disney Park with them.There are many games.It so excited.And we eat many food.But it very expensive.At second day,we went to Ocean Park.We have stayed there about three hours.It‘s a short time.It’s a big shame,too.But we have taken a lots photos.And we have bought some presents.
We had a good time at this trip.
请严重纠正吧,指出错误,给点意见吧.最好可以写篇例文来着

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I like traveling around the world with my father.缺动词
One day,we went to Hong Kong.时态错
On first day,we went to Disney Park with them.介词不对 不过问题不大
There were many games 时态问题
We were so excited that we eat many food,but .自己看吧~
We stayed there for about three hours.时态~
It wasa short time and it was a big shame,too.
But we took lots of photos and we bought some presents.
We had a good time during this trip.
主要是时态问题~介词搭配~这是改错么?还是初二刚学过完?