这篇英语作文有语法错误吗?IamverygladtoshareitwithyoumyShanghaiworldexpotrip,itbringsmealot.First,theactivityitselfreallyimpressedmealot,includingtheconstructions,foodsandtheparades.It’sreallyashocktome

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这篇英语作文有语法错误吗?
I am very glad to share it with you my Shanghai world expo trip,it brings me a lot.First,the activity itself really impressed me a lot,including the constructions,foods and the parades.It’s really a shock to me as all kinds of styles of buildings and costumes come in to my eyes,you know,as they are all something new to me and made me surprised.Second,the holding of World Expo in my own country brings me a sense of honor.It’s a symbol of the flourish of my homeland.Thirdly,the Expo is no only a exhibition to me but also a class; I really learned a lot from every word the guide told me and every picture that was shown in the buildings.Lastly,I want to say that the Expo really means a lot to me,the country,and the world.
这篇是我的命题演讲稿,过几天我就要去参加一个比赛了,求各位英语高手帮我看看什么地方有语法错误好吗?

Answer 1

第一句话就很别扭：你就可以直接说：I am very glad to share my Shanghai expo trip with you.
世博就是exposition,简称expo 就可以
第二句话的语意大概是：他教会了我许多,对吧.应该是：It's tayght me a lot.bring没有教会的用法
我给你重写吧,词还是你的,就是给你改改,你重复的太多,总是A LOT,英语尤其是口语最忌讳这个~从First开始：
First,the activity really impressed me deeply,including the constructions,foods and the parades.It’s really a shock to me,like all kinds of styles of buildings and costumes come in to my eyes,you know,as they are all something new to me and made me surprised.Second,the holding of World Expo in my own country brings me a sense of honor.It’s a symbol of the 此处换一个别的词 of my homeland.Thirdly,the Expo is not only a exhibition to me but also a class; I really learned a lot from every word the guide have told me and every picture that was shown to me.At Last,I want to say that the Expo really means a lot to me,the nation(更正规),and the world.
写的还是很有文笔的,但就是在自然点更好,我可能跟你一样是个中学生...