推荐信求改错~ToWhomItMayConcern,Re:LetterofRecommendationforMr.XXAsMr.BowenCheng'spresident,I'mprivilegedtorecommendMr.Chengwhograduatedfromourschool.IstronglyrecommendhimtoentryyourDenkiUniversity.Ihaveknownhimf

Question

推荐信求改错~
To Whom It May Concern,
Re:Letter of Recommendation for Mr.XX
As Mr.Bowen Cheng's president,I'm privileged to recommend Mr.Cheng who graduated from our school.I strongly recommend him to entry your Denki University.I have known him for 4 years during which time I’ve shaped an overall image of him.Thus,I’m happy to give an introduction outlining his high school life here,to enable you to assess his suitability for acceptance to your esteemed university.
It is a pleasure to have such an excellent student in our school.He is intelligent,diligent,attentive（这个词合适么） and has
a strong enthusiasm in learning.With class work he is conscientious,alert and
focused on the tasks.His homework is
thorough and punctual for he well understands the importance of this work in
assisting him with his learning（这里感觉不太对） and he has developed competence in him exam
technique with excellent time management skills.He actively takes part in
class activities and is capable of learning by himself after class.
He was an active participant in many school activities and earned many honor for his class.As being widely praised,Cheng has been getting on well with all his classmates and teachers,and is always ready to help others,either on study or in daily life.In the years studying in our school,he has never been at odds with other students,let alone rebutting with the teachers.He enjoys great adorations for he is doing everything for the good of others and greeting others with a smile.In such seldom case as being criticized by the teacher,he always accept it unperturbedly with certain necessary explanations,but never get annoyed or angry.As for Cheng's proposed study in your university,I have full confidence that he will extend his strengths and become actively engages of the activities organized by your university while completing diligently all the courses until his successful graduation.
I am proud to have Cheng as a student of our school.I wish him greater success in his academic studies and life in your university.
Sincerely,
Former president :Zhangen Zhang
The Middle School Attached to Hebei Normal University

Answer 1

To Whom It May Concern

Re: Letter of Recommendation for Mr. BowenCheng【若是指外方,应该是Letter of Recommendation to Mr. XX,但若是如此,就无需前面的To Whom It May Concern了】

As Mr. Bowen Cheng's high school president, I'm privileged to recommend to you Mr. Cheng who graduated from our school. I strongly recommend him to join the Denki University. I have known him for 4 years during which I’ve shaped an overall image of him. Thus, I’m happy to give an introduction outlining his high school life here, to enable you assessing his suitability for acceptance to your esteemed university.
It is a fortune to have such an excellent student in our school for he is intelligent and diligent in his study, and has a strong enthusiasm in learning.
He is conscientious with and alert in class work, and focused on the tasks. His homework is always done on time for he understood well the importance of this work in his learning. 【and he has developed competence in him exam technique with excellent time management skills. 这句似乎没有必要】He is active in class and is capable of learning by himself after class.
He has been an active participant in school activities and earned lots of honors for his class. As being widely praised, Cheng has been getting on well with all his classmates and teachers, and is always ready to help others, both on study and in daily life. In the years studying in our school, he has never been at odds with other students, let alone rebutting with the teachers. He enjoys great adorations as he is doing everything for the good of others and greeting others with a smile. In such seldom case as being criticized by the teacher, he always accepts it unperturbedly with certain necessary explanations, but never gets annoyed or angry.
As for Cheng's proposed study in the Denki university, I have full confidence that he will extend his strengths and will engage himself actively in the activities organized by your university while completing diligently all the courses until his successful graduation.
I am proud to have Cheng as a student of our school. I wish him greater success in his academic studies and life in your university.
Sincerely,


Zhangen Zhang, former president of
The Middle School Attached to Hebei NormalUniversity