英语改错,半小时内求解决My hair was used to be very long.i dreamed of donating it to sick children which had lost their hair.My teacher

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英语改错,半小时内求解决
My hair was used to be very long.i dreamed of donating it to sick children which had lost their hair.My teacher has donated her hair,so i wanted to donate mine,either.My dream came ture las christmas.after i told my teacher i was ready donate my hair ,she praised me.then we paid the visit to a hairdresser.the hairdresser cut 20 inch from my long hair and styled what was left .it was hard to say good-bye to my hair,so to help others made me feel happily.now some of my friends are growing their hair long so that they can donate them this year.

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My hair was(was去掉) used to be very long.i dreamed of donating it to sick children which (改为who)had lost their hair.
My teacher has(改为had) donated her hair,so i wanted to donate mine,either(改为too).My dream came ture last christmas.after i told my teacher i was ready (加上to)donate my hair ,she praised me.then we paid the (改为a)visit to a hairdresser.the hairdresser cut 20 inch(改为inches) from my long hair and styled what was left .it was hard to say good-bye to my hair,so(改为but) to help others made me feel happily(改为happy).now some of my friends are growing their hair long so that they can donate them (改为it)this year.