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I am frightened last night
Yesterday,when we were sleeping sudenlly the bed sway.I am frightened and went out quicky with my family.At that time,there were
a lot of people in the playground.I asked my friend,"are you frightened." he said,"I'm very frighten." I looked around the playground,everyone is frightened.I thought a lot of things,"After 5.12,the earthquake is often open the Sichuan,a lot of peoples died and a lot of children leaves the parents,I can invent a thing make the people don't afraid earthquake.
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I was frightened last night.
Last night when everyone's asleep,suddenly I felt the bed swaying.I woke up in fear and quickly ran out of my house with my family.
At that time,there were a lot of people in the yard.I saw a friend of mine and asked:Are you OK?He said:I'm very scared.I looked around the place and everyone is panicking and looking frightened.I can't help but start thinking,ever since the 5.12 earthquake,a lot of aftershocks had happened in Sichuan.Lots of people died and many children left their parents.I wish i could invent something to refrain people from being afraid of earthquakes.
稍稍改了一下.建议：尽量不要用词太重复,像frighten这个词,用的有点频繁.people没有复数形式.时态要统一,这篇应都用过去式.还有四川那句话,不确定你的意思,我就改成又发生了好多余震.你写的挺好的.加油～