帮忙修改一份自我介绍Goodmorning,everyone,HereI'llintroducemyself.Mynameisxx.Youcancallmexx.Iamcomingeighteen.Iamchangeable,justliketheweather.SometimesI'mcheerfulbutsometimesI'mgloomy.Thereare4peoplein

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帮忙修改一份自我介绍
Good morning, everyone, Here I 'll introduce myself. My name is xx. You can call me xx. I am coming eighteen. I am changeable, just like the weather. Sometimes I'm cheerful but sometimes I'm gloomy. There are 4 people in my family, including my father, my mother my elder sister and me. I have lots of hobbies, such as reading, singing traveling and so on and I like the Internet and pop music alone in my home. I especially like traveling. Because there’s an old Chinese saying: "It's better to travel 10000 miles than to read 10000 books."So, traveling really opens you eyes to other cultures. About study, I am not good at math and English. But they are important subject. I must work hard with them. Therefore it is a very annoying. Although my English is very poor, I still want to study well. After graduation, I want to continue my study. If I can, I will not go to the local university. I prefer to choose university, where are the mainland of china. In the future, I wish I will speak English well.
可以帮我修一修改吗?我想尽量再口语化点~~~还有~~好像还不够长~~我还能作些什麼上去呢?

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Good morning,everyone,please allow me to introduce myself.My name is XX and you can call me XX for short.I'm going to be 18 in (填月份或者日期).Well,speaking of my personality,I think I'm a little fic...