我写了一篇英语作文,想请学历高些知识量丰富的哥哥姐姐帮我指点一些错误,并指出原因.OurSchoolRulesInourschool,wehavetoomanyschoolrules.Butweknow,schoolmakesrulesisgoodforus.Soweallfollowtherules.

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我写了一篇英语作文,想请学历高些知识量丰富的哥哥姐姐帮我指点一些错误,并指出原因.
Our School Rules
In our school,we have too many school rules.But we know,school makes rules is good for us.So we all follow the rules.First ,I have to get uo early and before seven thirty to get school.Second,we can't fight with everyone.Third,we can't listen to music in the classroom.Fourth,we can'teat in the class.Fifth……
We all not free ,but happy.

Answer 1

英语专业路过～
问题如下：
1.school makes rules这句,建议改为：But we all know,the rules school made is good for us.
2.follow the rules,用obey the rules更好
3.get up early before seven...那个and是不需要的,后面最好再加上 on time,准时到校
4.we can't fight with everyone,改为Fighting is not allowed.祈使句显得更为有力
5.听音乐那句改为listening music in the classroom is not allowed also