谁能帮我改改我的英语日记我在学英文,这是我写的日记,我知道英文肯定错了很多,谁能帮我改改.日,刚醒,躺在床上,看看窗外,天灰蒙蒙的,黄昏?黎明?睡的时候是下午1点多吧,我都30个小时没睡

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谁能帮我改改我的英语日记
我在学英文,这是我写的日记,我知道英文肯定错了很多,谁能帮我改改.
日,刚醒,躺在床上,看看窗外,天灰蒙蒙的,黄昏?黎明?睡的时候是下午1点多吧,我都30个小时没睡了,才5个钟头就又醒了,又或者我睡了17个钟头?只是不想起床.小孩吵闹的从窗外路过,是下课了?还是去上学的路上?听见拉铁折门的声音,是早餐店开门了?还是夜宵店开门了?想着想着,又睡着了~
再醒来,天还是灰蒙蒙的.
One day,I just woke up in bed,there was grayish skies outside the window,dusk?dawn?when I slept at about 13:00 I was gone 30 hours without sleep,I just got 5 hours' sleep?or I had sleeping for 17 hours?just don't feel like turning.noisy pupil passed by,they were on the way home from school or on the way to school?I heard the sound from the roll-up door,a shop was open,the shop sold breakfast or supper?I dropped into sleep again.
When I woke up again,there was grarish outside the window.

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One day,I just woke up in bed,The sky looked a little gray outside of the window,Is it dusk now or dawn?when I slept at about 13:00 I had gone 30 hours without sleep,I have just got 5 hours sleep?or Have I sleeped for 17 hours?I still feel very sleepy and want to sleep more .Children played and laughed outside the window ,walking their way Are they back home or on the way to school?I heard the noise of the iron door opened,Was the little restaurant which sold breakfast or evening cakes begin to do its business?With this kind of thought in my mind .I dropped into sleep again.
When I woke up again,The sky still looked a little gray outside the window