高考英语作文求详细批改假如你是李华,你的澳大利亚笔友Mark对中国高中生的毕业庆祝活动很感兴趣.他来信想了解这方面的情况.请按照下面内容给他回信.1,介绍常见的庆祝当时及利与弊2,

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高考 英语作文 求详细批改
假如你是李华,你的澳大利亚笔友Mark对中国高中生的毕业庆祝活动很感兴趣.他来信想了解这方面的情况.请按照下面内容给他回信. 1,介绍常见的庆祝当时及利与弊 2,你认为更有意义的庆祝当时及理由 100词左右
Dear Mark,
Glad to hear from you. I’m very happy that you’re interested in the ways that we Chinese high school students celebrate our graduation. （括号前为题目中提示的括号后为我自己写的）
In China, the college entrance examination is really important, so students will relax themselves a lot after it. Many of them have parties and hold great feasts inviting their relatives and classmates. That create a relaxing atmosphere but really cost a lot of money. Some of them go traveling alone or with friends. They travel to places they dream of, and even go abroad to experience life.Traveling is good but sometimes can be dangerous. Also students write about their best wishes to friends. We feel warm at these notes but sad to leave high school forever.
I think the more meaningful way of celebrating it is to do some social work. Social work can develope your overall abilities and also promote awareness of helping others. It also indicates that you are an adult and take your responsibilities well.
（后面的格式是题目中给的固定的）
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
提供详细批改 包括
短语用得不对的地方 语法错误 低级错误
更高级的句型 润色的建议
作为高考作文不足之处
和优秀文章的差距
谢谢!

Answer 1

 In China, the college entrance examination is really important, so students will relax themselves a lot after it.评价：一句话说明了毕业庆祝的产生原因,句型词汇不足.修改： In China, no one ca...