我写了我的第一篇英语日记,求谁帮我看看有什么错误,或者可以有更好的表达么Wen.,May,4th FineI will keep a dairy from today on.I know there may be a difficulty to learn English well just as my Chinese,but I still want to h

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我写了我的第一篇英语日记,求谁帮我看看有什么错误,或者可以有更好的表达么
Wen.,May,4th Fine
I will keep a dairy from today on.I know there may be a difficulty to learn English well just as my Chinese,but I still want to have a try.Though there are many differences between English and Chinese,they are both languages,so these methods I study Chinese could be used in my English as well.And I blieve I'll do a good job.
I want to go to Peking University,and I know I'll manage to live my dream.
My first jounal is a little bit short,but it'll be more and more great,and so will my English.
我的英语作文是我最大的缺陷,所以我想写日记是最好的联系方法了吧,写的不太好,而且没什么内容,请帮忙看看,怎样表达更地道吧,

Answer 1

Generally speaking,you have done a good job.
整体而言,你写的不错.
1.Wednesday,星期三的简写是 Wed,不是Wen;
2.I will keep a dairy from today on；改成 I will keep writing dairy day by day ; 加上动词write,强调从现在开始坚持写日记这个动作；时间副词换成 day by day,强调每天都写；
3.so these methods I study Chinese could be used in my English as well；改成 so these methods by which I study Chinese could be used in my English as well;加上by which,修饰methods,方法跟我学习中文之间的关系,是通过这样的方法,所以要加上by which;
4.and I know I'll manage to live my dream.这句话没错,用的地方很恰当.如果用and I know I can make it 会更好；make it,能做成某事,很多场合都可以用这样一个简短的话.很地道的英文表达方法.实现梦想：make dream come true;
楼主的日记,现在单纯的是表达自己的一些感情或想法,这样的日记久了就很无趣.楼主可以适时的描述身边的人、事、物等,再加以自己的见解；会是一篇很不错的日记.
当然,这将是楼主今后宝贵的人生回忆.
Just do it; you will make it,I believe.