帮我看看我的英语作文好吗小伙伴们上次没写好被老师一通骂,唉.语法希望帮我指出来,能添加什么好句子也指出来吧,preparing a picnicpicnic is a pleasure trip in which food is taken to be eaten somewhere outdoor

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帮我看看我的英语作文好吗小伙伴们
上次没写好被老师一通骂,唉.语法希望帮我指出来,能添加什么好句子也指出来吧,
preparing a picnic
picnic is a pleasure trip in which food is taken to be eaten somewhere outdoors.it can be on the beach,on the river bank or in the park.this weekend i will go to the beach with my good friends for a picnic.it's so exciting.
we should first prepare necessary food,including mest,bread,drinks and so on.we can buy some chicken wings,some crisps and some hamburgers in the supermarket or in the noshery.we can buy some fruit from the market,such as apples,oranges,bananas.but bananas are always easy to go bad,so i buy some oranges.my friend likes bread so i will buy some too.but i will buy some breadafter seven o'clock.at this time the bread will be cheaper.
picnics are exciting.i hope that the weekend can be coming soon.
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in which food is taken to be eaten somewhere outdoors.我知道你想写一个从句,但是写的是错的.in which是一个用于位置的从句.这句话可以改成picnic is a pleasure trip that we can eat some delicious foods in outdoor.这就是一个定语从句.we should first prepare necessary food
这句话改为We should prepare nessary foods first.食物应该用复数.first不应该用在should后面.mest这个写错了哟,用复数meats.we can buy some fruit from the market,这句话可以在we前面加一个And,水果应该用复数.my friend likes bread so i will buy some too
这句话重复了.but i will buy some breadafter seven o'clock.at this time the bread will be cheaper.这句话写错了,你想写：在七点的时候买面包,因为它便宜.是不是?等你回了,我再给你改这句.把时间标明,是什么时候的七点.picnics are exciting把主谓都改成单数.大概是这样了.