英语作文修改,Igetupatseveno`clock.Ieatmybreakfastathalfpastseven.Igotoschoolateighto`clock.Igohomeathalfpastfour.Idomyhomeworkatfiveo`clock.Ieatmydinneratseveno`clock.Iplaycompurterateighto`clock.Igoto

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英语作文修改,
I get up at seven o`clock.I eat my breakfast at half past seven.I go to school at eight o`clock.I go home at half past four.I do my homework at five o`clock.I eat my dinner at seven o`clock.I play compurter at eight o`clock.I go to bed at nine o`clock.What a busy day!

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After getting up at seven o'clock,I enjoy my breakfast half an hour later.Then I hurry to school and spend my daytime from eight to four thirty p.m.there.I won't have my supper until seven even though I'm starving.However,the most exciting thing is I can play computer for an hour from eight.In the end at nine I feel obliged to gouti bed.So this is my agenda in a single day.How busy!
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