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请各位大牛看看这篇雅思大作文能得几分，谢谢了
题目：some people think people have benefited from modern communications technology, other people think some people have not benefited at all, to what extend do you agree or disagree?
The Internet communication has brought significant changes to society in recent years. But whether this modern technology is really beneficial to us become a heated topic. I personally believe Internet communication’ positive influence is over its negative side.
First of all, by using Internet, we can make our communication more convenient. For instance when we chat on QQ or MSN to our friends or families, even they are far away from you, we still can spread our minds and words in a second. By contrast in the past time, without this powerful tool, we only rely on writing letters to keep in touch with them, which could cost several days or even a month.
Equally importantly, Internet not only possess its convenience factor but also own merit of security. Although we talk or do business often by using telephones; however, the signal could be a vital problem which always bothers us. Like some tunnels or elevators, these are the places probably often missing signal.
Some individuals intend they do not benefit from modern technology absolutely. The reasons for them may result from spending too much time on chatting online and some of them cannot communicate with people by face-to-face normally. Actually they just abuse the function of this useful tool and over rely on it. That is why there are increasing people preferring to stay at home all day long and their social skill are fading away.
By way of conclusion, I once reaffirm my position that these incredible advantages of Internet communication outweigh its drawbacks meanwhile it has its undeniable impact on human life.

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