Goodmorning.Iamgladtobehereforthisinterview.Firstletmeintroducemyself.Mynameis11111,Iam24yearsold.IcomefromBeijing.IgraduatedfromthearchitecturedepartmentofBeijingArchitecturalengineeringUniversityinJanuary,2010.I'

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Good morning.I am glad to be here for this interview.First let me introduce myself.My name is 11111,I am 24 years old.I come from Beijing.I graduated from the architecture department of Beijing Architectural engineering University in January ,2010.
I'm an editor at 1111111 four years ago.My major work is write architecture book.While I like it,but,this wook is being quiet or still or inactive.I’m interested in sports and journey.
I think I am an honest and optimistic,can also work under great pressure.This is probably,The position your company offers is a great opportunity for me.I look forward to becoming part of the Action team.Thank you.
我的英语水平非常差,这是自己写的英语自我介绍,希望朋友们帮我修改完善一下.

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Good morning,everyone,
I am very glad to attend this interview here.
At first,I'd like to introduce myself to you.My name is 11111,and I am 24 years old.I come from Beijing and I graduated from the Architecture Department of Beijing Architectural Engineering University in January ,2010.
I was an editor at 1111111 four years ago.My major work was to write architecture books.I liked it very much,because it is a quiet work and I love it.My hobbies are sport and traval.My friends always say that I am an honest and optimistic person who can work under great pressure effectively.I think this position your company offers is suits me and I hope I can grasp this great opportunity .I am looking forward to become one of your team.Thank you very much.
这位姐姐,我只是把你的语法,逻辑理顺哦 希望有点帮助啦