一首英文情诗,帮忙找语法错误.TheLoveroftheSoulJaejoongOppa,theloverofmysoul.Thegodgaveyouthemostbeautifulface,Theclearesteyes,&thevoiceoftherainbow.WhenIsawyourface,Iwasfallinginlovewithyou.WhenIenjoyed

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一首英文情诗,帮忙找语法错误.
The Lover of the Soul
Jaejoong Oppa,the lover of my soul.
The god gave you the most beautiful face,
The clearest eyes,
& the voice of the rainbow.
When I saw your face,
I was falling in love with you.
When I enjoyed your eyes,
My heart would go on.
When I listened to your songs,
I was seeing the beautiful rainbow.
Jaejoong Oppa,
Do you know?
You tears can make me cry.
Your smile can make me smile,
Because you are my whole world.
You are Korean,
I am Chinese,
You are man,
I am girl.
But nothing can change my love ……to you.
A long time ago,
You asked me:
“Stay with me tonight?”
Now I will reply:
“I will stay with you every night.”
不好意思,我还是初中生,如有错误,

Answer 1

突然发现我老了,现在的女孩比男孩还浪漫,积极,哎
第二行god前面的"the"可以去掉
You are man --> You are boy,I am girl
But nothing can change my love...to you --> for you
其他...还不错