帮我看看我写的英语作文,有语法上的问题没?文章结构,给点建议.怎样写好作文.Onoctober24,1902,MaxSchuschyinventedDisposableplasticbags.Itwaswidelyusedbypeopleatonetime.Becauseitwasconvenient.Greenmarketan

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帮我看看我写的英语作文,有语法上的问题没?文章结构,给点建议.怎样写好作文.
On october 24,1902,Max Schuschy invented Disposable plastic bags.It was widely used by people at one time.Because it was convenient.Greenmarket and supermarket both provide free disposable plastic bags.But,as time goes on,people clearly realize it's the harm.
The widely use of Disposable plastic bags brought human great harm.First it affected farm development.Second,it kept on animal threat.Third,it had a serious effect on our health.Fourth,it polluted the enironment,and so on.So,in order to our health and our homeland,we must face a question.
On June 1st,2008,our country began to forbid producing and selling and using disposable plastic bags.To do so,it suited a concept that building a resource efficient society,and it could save resources,it could let people set up the consciousness of environmental protection.
In my opinion,there is no doubt that Limiting the use of disposable plastic bags is a good idea for us.

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1.but变成however,因为有逗号
2.第一段最后一句.时态不一致.
3.queston不合适,maybe difficult problem is better
4.第三段,去掉第一个and,用逗号
5.第三段,第二个it could去掉
6.最后一句改成it的形式主语.